is this poem good

[Johnny Yesno]

I think the needle line is referring to the thin narrow streets rather than the wide avenues of Manhattan (is Manhattan wide? I've never been), or just a bit of fuck-it poetic imagery, which is alright, too.

If a van's a drug, then a thin narrow street is a huge needle injecting it into Manhattan.

[Buelligan]

Just prose but the Word formatting fucked up.



I write 'poetry', and I've never won a prize for anything I've submitted (obviously) but to think I've lost out to something like that makes me sad.

Don't be sad.  Get a gold star, stick it to the paper.  Show it to people.  You won poetry.

[bgmnts]

It's not about the gold sticker, but deep down you want to know that someone appreciates you, what you feel, and how you express it, on some level.

[Buelligan]

Maybe.  Not convinced.  You feel it when your work is good.  It heals.  It makes you whole.  Other people cannot give you that.  Even if they want to.

[Ray Travez]

I think the needle line is referring to the thin narrow streets

Nah. She's saying she's been stitched up.

[Mr Vegetables]

Someone more talented than me could definitely do this poem as a version of Parklife

[Underturd]

It would probably be okay spoken, like a rap, in fact I reckon that's what it actually is.